gunter sim

[phil simpson]

Character Name: gunter sim
Rank: SS-Sturmmann--Private First Class
What Army Will You Serve Beneath? : Nazi/German Army
Nationality: English(British)
Character History:

married to andrea working in a soup kitchen in berlin little daughter is a bdm girl

Writing Sample:

i remain still trying not to shake or breath loudly and plan my next move

Approved/Denied?: Neither Yet
Staff Notes:

Approved/Denied?: Denied
Staff Notes:

Unfortunately, please check out some of the other applications to get a good feel for what they should look like. You will need alot more information in your Bio, and alot more writing being very descriptive in your Writing sample, the first line you have there sounds fairly good, but you need to extend on it a bit. Also be sure to talk in Third Person Past Tense. So like this "He walked over to the door way, peering cautiously around the corner preying he wouldn't be shot." If you do decide to re post, please create a new thread for a new application.

Thanks,

And Sorry,

~Austin!