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Post by phil simpson on Oct 25, 2008 17:24:01 GMT -5
Character Name: gunter sim Rank: SS-Sturmmann--Private First Class What Army Will You Serve Beneath? : Nazi/German Army Nationality: English(British) Character History: married to andrea working in a soup kitchen in berlin little daughter is a bdm girl Writing Sample: i remain still trying not to shake or breath loudly and plan my next move Approved/Denied?: Neither Yet Staff Notes: Approved/Denied?: Denied Staff Notes: Unfortunately, please check out some of the other applications to get a good feel for what they should look like. You will need alot more information in your Bio, and alot more writing being very descriptive in your Writing sample, the first line you have there sounds fairly good, but you need to extend on it a bit. Also be sure to talk in Third Person Past Tense. So like this "He walked over to the door way, peering cautiously around the corner preying he wouldn't be shot." If you do decide to re post, please create a new thread for a new application.
Thanks,
And Sorry,
~Austin!
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