Gabriel Hammond - Application

[Mark Wright]

Username: Vercingtorix
Character Name: Gabriel Hammond
Rank: Private
What Army Will You Serve Beneath? : US(American)
Nationality: English(British)
Character History:

An unblooded soldier from a working class family in England yet to experience real combat, fighting for his country, lured into the military by the romantic glory of the life of a soldier.

Writing Sample:

I would try to stay calm, then swiftly find some good cover preferably in an area with sight obstacles (trees, bushes, houses etc.), then I would scope out the area and if a target is acquired I would try to discern if it was a friendly soldier, enemy soldier or an innocent civilian, if it was a friendly soldier I would make my presence known to him and move together. If it was a civilian I would then just try to slip away but if it was an enemy soldier I would try to take him out or try to slip away depending on his rank, awareness etc if multiple targets are acquired swiftly fallback to the allied line without engaging the enemy. I'd be filled with adrenaline knowing that I may have to kill an enemy soldier or be killed myself.

Approved/Denied?: Denied
Staff Notes:

Unfortunately, denied. Sorry to say, but you need to working on your writing sample speaking more like.... He did then this, speak in 3rd person. Take a look at some of the other applications so you can see the writing style I want you to use. Remember you can redo and re post another application!

~Austin!