Kuhner application

[KiraYagami]

Username: Kira
Character Name: Kuher Weitlinchinski
Rank: SS-Scharführer
What Army Will You Serve Beneath? : Nazi/German Army
Nationality: German
Character History:

Kuher was the son or a bar owner in berlin where he was a hand at the bar for most of his life until a local mad man killed his father and his mother had died during child birth the police had caught the killer but he signed up for the army at 18 since he had nothing left

Writing Sample:

while i think about the possilbilty of a Soviet following me i search my rations and then go off into the woods on the long way acting like im not noticing anything just incase he is following me im thinking i could lose him or if he takes a shot he could have a lower accuracy and then turn and shoot him down and continue on my way carefully

Approved/Denied?: Denied
Staff Notes:

Many mistakes, yes some were typos, but those were not counted, but you don't use grammar what-so-ever in your RP sample. So, please try again if you wish, and good luck this time.

~Walter