Post by Jhon on Jan 6, 2010 17:42:33 GMT -5
Username: Kira
Character Name: Jhon Weitlinchinski
Rank: SS-Hauptmann
What Army Will You Serve Beneath? : Nazi/German Army
Nationality: German
Character History:
Staff Notes:
Character Name: Jhon Weitlinchinski
Rank: SS-Hauptmann
What Army Will You Serve Beneath? : Nazi/German Army
Nationality: German
Character History:
Jhon was born in 1922,May 1st. On June 5th 1928 his mother dissapeared. His brother dissapeared with his mother that day. He lived in Berlin with his father who ran a local pub. He father was Murdered in 1939 by a serial killer. He was caught the following month. He joined the german army in 1940 after the pub went bankrupt.He had nothing left there plus he wanted to look for his brother.Writing Sample:
I slowly look around me , thinking "This dosen't feel right here". My hand reaches for my ammo and pulls I to see my ammo left. I walk off into the woods setting some traps incase im being followed. I Notice snow on the ground so I double back throught the Woods , I look at the snow to see if there is a second set of footprints following me. I see that there is a second set. " Dammit , this was supposed to be a routine recon." I load my Rifle to full ammo and check the workings. I walk off back to where I came from the first time. I see the Soviet that had followed me so aim my rifle at him and fired at his leg he falls. I walk up to him and question him about his squad and if there is any others following me. He reluctantly speaks i shoot him in the face with my rifle. "Damn Russian don't trust a word he said" I walk off placing trip grenades incase he lied about his squadmates. I walk off going in all different directions to throw off any possible people following me. I hear a explosion in the woods so I hide behind a tree and wait."Can this day get any worse?" Once the remaining Soliders walk in my sight range I aim and fire at their commander , I miss the shot. so I change my position and wait for them to advance. I grab their commander and hold my hand on his mouth , pull his pistol and shoot his squad after only missing 2 shots. One of the soliders took a shot at me and hit his commander in the chest. I Leave the bodies in the woods and take my Rifle. I walk back to the German frontlines"Now lets hope that was all of them cause im in a real bad mood now "Approved/Denied?: Neither Yet
( Last time was denied for grammar errors i dont see any but its not my best sub srry about it )
Staff Notes:
Very nice job, but I don't think you should go for Captain with this application. More like Corporal or Sergeant. I would accept you to let you modify this one. The RPing here is in third person, your RP sample is written in first person. So, if you would like to edit this one, you will be accepted to do so, just shout out in the cbox. Also, if you could make the history longer, that would be great too.
~Walter