Frank Alter Application

[Drake]

Username: frankalter
Character Name: Frank Alter
Rank: Private
What Army Will You Serve Beneath? : US(American)
Nationality: American
Character History:

Frank Alter was born on the beaches of Florida.When he was 14 the war was getting close to starting.So his brother ran off to join.3 months later he learned his brother was killed at Pearl Harbor.So Frank ran off to join.He was only 18.

Writing Sample:

Huh?What is that?WHO'S THEIR?!Tap tap,Captain this is Frank Alter I'm coming back to camp.Huh?! Yes sir!Great just great.I have to take out a camp.Ugh better get it over with.I aimed to 2 germans.Blam blam!Hit them both.I rolled behind a tent.I aimed around looking for action.I saw two germans.One sleeping one cooking.I sneaked behind the cooking one.Wham!Right over the head.Then I thrusted the other ones stomach with a knife
Click!I put a Colt up to him.Make a word and you'll be part of your friend's dinner.Wham!I didnt have time to waste.I planted some dinomite.Then I hear a click behind me.I turned to see the whole german camp aiming at me.If what happened next wasnt luck than I dont know what luck is.I saw 5 gasbarrles beside me.Raising my hands I slide the dinomite over at the barrels.I took a MP-40,This was the luck part.I rolled and shot as fast as i could.BOOM!I rolled down a hill and heard it.That made sure I did the job right.I stole a Koblewagon(Sorry if I spelt it wrong)And drove off.Captain. I said when I stopped.Good job son.Good job.You can have twenty minutes to get yourself ready,lunch,then report back to my tent.By the way,Good job on stealing the vehical.Thank you sir,I replied.Then I drove to my tent.

Approved/Denied?: Denied
Staff Notes:

Please re write it in third person. Saying stuff such as, He did, frank went, then we. That's Third person. It's what we require you write in on the board. Sorry its just much easier to understand.


~Austin!